I have done some pretty bizarre things in my day: watched parrots fly through the sulfuric fumes of a Nicaraguan volcano, fired an automatic grenade launcher, I even drank Fresca with cyclamates. But nothing prepared me for the quagmire known as the query letter.
Thank goodness for the writer community!
In my last post, I presented the opening statement of my first query letter. The response was awesome, in number and in quality. Several writers had similar suggestions; all were positive in their constructive criticism. Thus, I present paragraph 1 of query v4.0:
“Trying to show her parents she could be a success without a man, young Elena Martinez joins the Navy, only to soon find herself about to be dishonorably discharged. Left with no choice but to accept orders becoming the Navy’s newest covert agent, Elena is given a mission where she will face treacherous arms merchants and zealous Iranian commandos while trying to save the world from evil domination. Then Elena’s father calls and her life really becomes interesting.”
I’m not saying this is the final version, but at least it’s a better version. And why do I think this?
Because writers rock!
And Fresca tastes better with cyclamates.
P.S. Thanks to all who commented. You all really do rock!
- To what depths the Query Letter descends? (djlutz.wordpress.com)